Date ficlet

by Blood Red Sky
originally published at 02:20PM on Saturday, February 02, 2008

“I was wondering if you would like to go to dinner and a movie with me?” Jonothan asked.
“Seriously?” Christie replied.
“Yeah.”
“Umm… okay,” Christie giggled.
“Cool pick you up at 6:30 on Friday, see ya then.”
“Okay,” she said turning to her friends “Did he just ask me out?”
Her friends giggled.
“Oh well it can’t hurt to try”
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“Here we are Dave and Busters” Jonothan said as he pulled into the parking lot. “And right after dinner we can go see whatever movie you want.”
“Mm” was Christie’s reply
The two walked into the restuarant and got seated immediatly. “Go ahead and order whatever you want”
“Kay” she said looking uncomfortable.
After dinner they decide to go play arcade games.
“Here is a game pass play whatever you want”
“Okay” she said.

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Comments

  • from Blood Red Sky:

    based on a dream

  • from kells:

    Hey, this looks like a cute start, but I have to say, it felt kind of rushed. My suggestion might be to break it up into two ficlets, so you could have more space to develop the ‘before’ and ‘results’ half.

  • from Blood Red Sky:

    i’m going to take you’re advice thankies

  • from Blood Red Sky:

    i’m going to take you’re advice thankies

  • from Blood Red Sky:

    i’m gonna mark it as a draft

  • from lost_at_sea:

    I agree with Kells. The ficlet did feel kind of rushed, and I think you could have added a bit more detail. By the way, “immedeatly” should be spelled as “immediately”. But I do think that this story could go somewhere. :)

  • from Kermitgorf:

    A nice beginning to a nice date.