Letting it Out (One More Word Challenge)

by Blusparrow
originally published at 07:03PM on Sunday, April 20, 2008

“How long?”

“How long what?”

“How long have you…”

“Have I really liked him?”

“Yes, I need to really know.”

“Why do you really need to know?

“This is really hard for me to say”

“You know you can tell me anything at all.”

“I thought I would just be able to say it.”

“We are great friends and you know that you can tell…”

“I want to tell you that I am in love with you!”

“Now that wasn’t so hard to say to me was it, wait, what?”

“I have never in my life felt something more true to me than this. I want you and I can no longer hide how I feel about you Sally.”

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Comments

  • from ♠Ana Cristina♥:

    Wow, that was intense. The buildup was really very good. Great job!
    LoA

  • from BARomero:

    The really great thing about this one was that the growing size of the sentences (as per the challenge) actually matched up metaphorically with the build up of emotion within the scene. Masterfully done.

  • from Mistress Elsha Hawk:

    Okay so the last line was confusing, but I love how this builds up to a climactic ending!

  • from Kermitgorf:

    I love that this challenge fits so well with all dialogue.. one of my favorite forms of writting. I agree with BaRomero about the build up.
    LoA

  • from Freedom:

    Intense.
    LoA

  • from thebetweenspace:

    A wholehearted ditto of what BARomero said! And it works so well, because I can completely relate. I think I’ve had that conversation before. :)

  • from judee4u2:

    Great job! And I like the format – it’s so easy to read with this challenge.

  • from Stovohobo:

    BARomero basically said it just right. The sentences really build it up. Better than some of the middle- to high-school ficlets about ooey gooey love and romance. This was good. =)