The Pillar - Corporal Blake

by Browncoatben
originally published at 05:49PM on Thursday, May 22, 2008

Corporal Blake’s entire body was tense. He was panting heavily, sweat beading from his head and fogging his HUD -visor. But it was gone. That thing. It had disappeared in a blazing flash of light.

He swiveled his chair to survey the room. The Port Gun Control Room was unchanged. Undamaged. But also empty. Phelps and Hendricks were gone. Only a HUD -visor lay on the floor, rocking gently as if someone had lightly kicked it.

“What the hell,” he muttered aloud, confused.

He turned to his console and pulled a status report. No damage to gun systems, no shots fired, GCR door locked from inside.

Activating his comm, he reported his situation. “Damage Control, Port Gun Control.”

Go..G…Go, GC. came a shaky voice.

“Systems nominal, DC. But Captain Hendricks and Corporal Phelps are MIA .” He looked around again. “They’re gone.”

Copy, GC. No instructions at this time.

Blake had never been alone in here before. It’s against Regs. It was too damn quiet.

And his eyes hurt.




  • from KevMullins:

    WOW ! So I see you did work “Corporal Blake” into your evil plans. :)
    Perfect balance on the conversations here. Great flow.

  • from JLaughter:

    I dig it! Great stuff! I’ll jump in some other time, you keep it up!

  • from Browncoatben:

    I’m really proud of the last line…really got me excited when I wrote it.

    Thanks guys!

  • from THX 0477:

    Loved the line about not being alone cause it’s against regs, like that’s really the thing to be concerned about. But that’s how the mind works sometimes.

  • from thebetweenspace:

    That was a great and very telling final line.