Bridezilla

by Mask By The Moon
originally published at 11:15PM on Sunday, May 27, 2007

her future husband’s car. Could he have really left her at the alter? He’d better not have. Is he dead? He will be if he doesn’t show up. She stood up and walked back inside the chapel, washing away the thought. She sighed and leaned against the wall. “He’d better not have left me…”

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Comments

  • from brunettechick:

    Hey, I love the story line but I have one suggestion. Make your sentences flow. Like try to make each one connect using words that transition. You feelin’ me? Other than that awesome!!!! Thanx for putting it on here!

  • from brunettechick:

    Oh, by the way, you said you needed lessons from me so I’m here to help!! Whatever you need : )

  • from May-Lynn Miller:

    it was a pertty good sequel. But im with brunettechick, make them flow with the rest of the story and your other sentences. But it was really good though.

  • from Mask By The Moon:

    OK thanks guys, I’ll try to do that!