Stop trying to smoosh everything into a paragraph. You have a lot of emotion here – separating it into separate paragraphs allows the reader time to digest one emotion before moving on to the next.
you know the funny thing is when i wrote this, i was writing it to a friend and just happened to decide to post it. i actually hate it because of exactly what you said, it’s too much emotion and too little time.
Alexa ♥
Black Ink