what’s the being?

Well, It’s part of a book that im going to write, I just like to use Ficlet as a way to practice and such. But the being is an alien, to long to have to explain all of it, guess you’ll just have to read the book when it comes out. (and im only 12)

Someone respond to my writing, its helping me with my writing, so if you please.

I really like the varied description in here. Some nit-picky things like sentence structure and such could be tweaked (I hate learning grammar, and much less preaching it) but overall, it’s nice.
From an aesthetic standpoint, I’ve found that double-spacing your paragraphs on ficlets is great. No “tab” button here, so it’s much easier for the eye to follow.
Well, sorry for all the critiquing, but I liked the writing a lot.

Thanks dude. I’m not really trying my best here. It’s just a nice little website to discuss wrighting tips and practicing grammer, so It’s just a nice place to have fun with. I’ll have to write something serious some time though and see what you guys think.

Nice atmosphere. The word redemption is out of place. Maybe release would work instead.

Where do you see ‘Redemption”?

Oh nvm. I see it

oOo, very nice, i like this story =]