Fantastic! This sounds like it would be a great into to a novel – I’d be curious to see who he was – why wouldn’t anyone suspect him? And why did he do it?

[PS you win at life for having the Survivor quote in your profile!]

Wow. This makes you really, really want to know more. What’s the story?? In desperate need of a sequel.

emma jo is right, please sequel this story. Imagery here is fantastic.. You illustrated the story well, leaving us begging for more. The calling card of a great writer!

Wowzers, this is realy good! It makes me wanna keep reading! Write more plz!!