I really like the play on words in the finale.

I like the dialogue and your description of what is going on, also, I like the vocabulary in the first paragraph. Good job.

I love “a funeral sort of way.” I think Emily could use a bit more ironic snark. :)
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quirky original character in the homeless woman.. can feel the past era in the dialog. awesome!

Whoa there! Very nice! I must say I LOVE the title. Awesome dialogue. Sequel please?

Hey, great title…awesome play on words there…I really liked this!! You really developed Evelyn’s character.
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very cute. i like how you intrudoced Emily and her powers. And I love the dialoge =)
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Ooh…nice character build…more?

Great descriptions! An A-1 read!

“you’re cute, in a funeral sort of way.” that made me smile. :) therefore, 5 STARS !!
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Title had me laughing for a good half minute, but after that it was a bit confusing, wondering when that would fit in.
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“Cute, in a funeral sort of way” is a perfect description of Emily. :)