i liiike you definitely have got a hold on dark mystery and creepiness which is a specialty among me and my friends. niiiice! :)

i liiike you definitely have got a hold on dark mystery and creepiness which is a specialty among me and my friends. niiiice! :)

i liiike you definitely have got a hold on dark mystery and creepiness which is a specialty among me and my friends. niiiice! :)

btw scratch out the last two, my computer wasnt working.

This was nice and dark some sentence would need some working on but besides that it was a nice creepy feel to it that makes it work out well

Awww, so very sad. I like the end the best. It flows very well and Disturbed Youth is right. I wish I could write poems like that! All of mine are hideously sappy love poems written to a guy that dosn’t even know he id being written about. LOL
LoA

wow. excellent twist at the end. such an air of mystery and darkness in your poems. very nice.

Good job, although you don’t need an apostrophe (‘) at the end of verbs. Only use them in contractions and to show possession with nouns and pronouns.
OK, grammar lesson over! :)
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Very dark, but with a twist, a happy ending. I would say there are a few forced rhymes like with abusing and amusing, and yes a few places where apostrophes shouldn’t be.

Bah to apostrophes! Bah! I say!
Look! Apostrophes!
’’’’’’’’’’’’’’
Lol, sorry. I’m done now.

i like it! very suspenseful until the end, which i like too.

Wow. Very powerful images. Excellent work!

Very strong stuff. I love your poems.

Excellent!!!!!