oh… wow
kind of reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe’s Tell-Tale Heart. The last line mostly. they’re really different, but still
anyways, this is really good. kind of creepy too. but good
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I am embarrassed to admit that I have never read Tell-Tale Heart. I really should.
And thanks, wytherwings. I was going for creepy in this one. :)

Don’t really thing a cold blooded killer like him would be bothered by such a thing as a conscience.
He’s nearly as creepy as the dude in No Country for Old Men.
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Wow. This was amazing. Very creepy, with such great word choice. Flesh and muscle parted like water. Incredible.
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Wow. This was amazing. Very creepy, with such great word choice. Flesh and muscle parted like water. Incredible.
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freaky I agree with everything above…this story gave me the creeps! i love it!
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Perfect descriptions for the story, with the insight to the narrator’s mind, and the consequences of his (or her, I guess) actions. Well….sort of like the Tell-Tale Heart, yes. I love it.

I love Tall Tale Heart! And the beating beating beating! Grew loulder and faster! It does remind me of that too! Good job!
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So descriptive, life through the eyes of a killer. Kind of reminds me of Crime and Punishment where the guy premidates a plan for the perfect murder, but then loses what’s left of his sanity due to the guilt. Excellent.