Wow. I really like this and hope you write a sequel!
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Wow, sounds like a beautiful cave. I like all your colorful descriptions, and how you added a problem at the end. Oh, and another thing: I wrote a poem once and named it underwater world. It’s a good title ;p

Fascinating and magical with just a hint of, “Oops, we may have goofed a bit.”
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Nice discription! Colors! hehe!
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Very cool, a fabulous description and a nice plot twist!

Totally agree with every thing above. =) Very good descritptions.
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Nice. Very nice. Love the descriptions!
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Really good descriptions!

I like how you managed to fit in a little Espanol. Nice touch.. Good descriptoins, per the challenge. Nice Job. Muy bien!!

Excellent story, greatly described. I loved the line the cave’s mouth was twisted in an evil grin.