This is a very good entry into the series. It flows really well. And you seem to have a handle on how to do good dialog.

I forget how great your writing style is. Love the gritty mood.

I agree with John, your conversations are spot on. You dropped a great amount of information without it feeling like a deposition.

Very nice pacing, and I agree with JP, the dialogue is fantastic.

you are just showing off now. i give you one star for being a showboat. jk

I also dug the dialogue and I love the titular line First rule: Never ask.