Wow, very tragic and unsettling realization in that slow motion moment.

the tragedy and darkness is superb. well written THX .
All hail the LoA

Wow…..the slow motion view of the girl that he’s hitting and the tention of all of it makes it very interesting and very tragic. You did a really good job on this, as you do on all of your ficlets. Keep it up. :)

what a story, he seems to be feeling guilty for hitting her, after the fact of course. descriptive in her appearance. the momentum builds right up to the climax.

Wow, definitely a dark story. It was definitely an interesting way of describing this event, a point of view I would not have thought of.

Bitch better have my money.

Yikes, John Perkins. I don’t know what scares me more, THX ’s story or your comment.
Seriously, though, this is really powerful stuff. It makes my entry look like crap, quite frankly.

Absolutely wonderful job. Very precise.

Totally intense. I almost didn’t want to enter after reading this one, knowing I wouldn’t come close to being this good. Well done.
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Perkins comment made me laugh, which I needed after reading this entry. Incredible scene THX , really powerful and hard hitting. Pun intended.

Wow THX , your powers of description are truly awesome. This is a great piece of ficleteering.

@John – Your capacity for off the wall and tasteless humour continues to supply me with giggles :-D

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