Nice. I love that you did the same thing I did by taking a secondary character and showing the effects of what happened. It’s a very truthful series of events.
I really enjoy your writing, as you come up with completely off-the-wall stuff that reminds me of one of my high school buddies. And I suppose I could ask you to pay more attention to grammar, but it’d be like asking Thelonius Monk to stick to the melody. So, five stars for the mood and overall brilliance of the piece, non-conforming as it is.

i meant to say watch that man die. lol it felt more ike heroin to me than watched. oh my to the gods so know i am a cross between john waters and t monk. if there is destiny let it take me now it must be a good day to die.

Another very real sequel that works on its own but also describes a secondary character and the effects of the event. Terrific final line, for a second I thought the priest was gonna get some.

Oh, I really liked this. I feel like I need to sequel. Give me a bit of time to think of something.

I forgot to comment last night:
I wrote a sequel. Hope it doesn’t completely suck.