Well… very descriptive, the mood is set well, I just can’t help but think of cheesy teen movies or romance novels… What makes them special? What makes me care?

I think it’s great,cheesey or not!

So wonderful.

Cheesy, kitschy and horribly real. That’s pretty much what I was going for.

I like the last line because I think everyone feels that way when they are a teenager.

a really good sequel. and again, write more!!!