oh, love the begining Blu!

Great start to a novel. this definitely has potential. I suggest to up your word count on NaNoWriMo you might want to split “On the Brightside though” to “On the bright side though”

wow! amazing. I’m impressed. I loved the use of present tense. It gives it the feel you wanted. Sequel this, I’m dying to find out what happens. If you do, let me know. Great job.