this is good, i like the second para. i think in the first para, you could use some metaphors rather than saying it directly.

Wow, love how you write whats in your heart, keep it up! From all of the experiences we face there is a pearl, keep knowing whats in you.

this is really good.

wow. this is really well written. you can definitely tell that it is written from the heart. you definitely have a lot of talent as a writer

I think the first stanza is too repetative, but it definitely improves after that.

Beautiful, i love how u write what you feel.