I like internal dialogue, and the continuation is nice.
i like it a lot!
and how you have little comments like, ouch. they make the story have humor. i like humor
I think it needs another sequel, I’m horrible at this kind of story though…
yeah im not sure where to take it from here either.
Storykeeper of Fae
anono-mouse
anono-mouse
Fyora Cartagan
Dreamer