this is really good, i love the emotion. but i think if you just wrote it out straight without the (awkward) line breaks, it would read alot easier and be all-together a better piece.keep up the good work!
very well written.
Originally, I tried to shrink both parts of this poem into one piece, but I think it suffered, so it’s now in two parts.
Suburban Saint
Nouvelle Bardot
Alexa ♥